The Prophecy That Is

If only i had a chance to make things better
For they aren’t any fair now, never

Oh, i could build cities n’ kingdoms
None too many to eradicate our ambits
Love and plenty in each and every
Young and alike, no more foreboding

I have tried, and i will so on,

Had i had a say, in his divine play,
Augmented on this reality of our tale,
Dancing, merry, and a concord, yet faraway.

A wisdom, stark, and on my face.

Crimson, and raw the dusk sets
Higher powers in its play
Anger, Age, and no other humanly in the fray
Nigh, the time draws, so slow and soft
Creeping unto mortality, bare, and bitten
Elegies and sobs, and an old violin say

Together and only thus, a song is sung
Of erased pasts and a united dominion.

Make a wish, and whistle into the air,
And listen, listen close, she’ll say,
Kings and commanders have come this way,
Enduring what i have bequeathed.

The days that were, and those that will be,
Hurdles that there were, and those that are,
Incepting the fact, of pervert men and sinful too,
Notwithstanding a force this strong,
Gore and death that followed, a bout of blasphemy
Sans a box, to put these sins back in,

Beloved and all, see it and sing, a song of accord,
Edge it out of your lives, the sorrow and ire,
Transcend beyond, for we aren’t meant this way,
To a happy life, and no qualms or despair,
Enervate that greed, and do it now,
Reality will not last for another epoch.

36 responses to “The Prophecy That Is”

  1. alakaline Avatar

    Is this something like an acrostic?
    Well written.

    1. jargnar Avatar

      yeah i guess thank you! :O

  2. Jingle Avatar
    Jingle

    I break the rule to take this one in,

    if only I have a chance to make things better,
    love it.
    well done.

  3. Sayandeep Kundu Avatar

    Nice piece.. potent, artistic..the poetic dexterity in you shows.. liked it
    Regards~ Sayandeep

    1. jargnar Avatar

      Thank you!

  4. B.K. Brown Avatar

    I love your creativity with the first line going down the poem’s line, most people are not able to execute it well without it sound forced, but this is a delightful job.

    I also enjoy the heavier feel behind the obvious small problems the nameless character has:

    “build cities n’ kingdoms”
    “Had i had a say, in his divine play”
    “Reality will not last for another epoch.”

    Gives the poem a much deeper feeling.

    -Bk

    1. jargnar Avatar

      Thank you very much for the patience and appreciation! :)

  5. Sumit Sarkar Avatar

    Wonderful my friend…
    This is an excellent poetry :)
    great flow, great rhythm…

    1. jargnar Avatar

      thanks! :)

  6. Dr Madan Goyal Avatar

    Creative cute and superb piece.
    Loved reading it.

    1. jargnar Avatar

      thankyou!

  7. ScottlB Avatar

    very good work, nice flow to it

  8. Leo (Leonnyes) Avatar

    very beautifully written. liked the acrostic fashion too, Jargnar!

    Here is my Rally Poem

    1. jargnar Avatar

      thankyou!:)

  9. Chick Under Construction Avatar

    Nice read. Very creative as well. Hmmm, if I could create a kingdom what would it be…..

    1. jargnar Avatar

      :)

  10. Sam373 Avatar
    Sam373

    You had me from the start.
    “…If only i had a chance to make things better
    For they aren’t any fair now, never…”.

    1. jargnar Avatar

      Thank you :)

  11. Rajlakshmi Avatar

    an amazing write… beautifully penned.

  12. -D Avatar

    you can still make things better. :)

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  14. robin ellen lucas Avatar

    your words are powerful… the energy behind them
    i nominated you for week35 poets award ;)

    1. jargnar Avatar

      Oh thank you very very much :)
      Honored!

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  16. frayedges Avatar

    You’ve done a great job with this acrostic. I enjoyed it.

  17. dancingfreak Avatar

    this is super… :D

  18. Gemma @ Greyscale Avatar

    The acrostic element is like an elemental whisper in the wings! It barely seems to control the lovely series of ideas in the poem. Especially loved “Sans a box, to put these sins back in,” I am sure that Pandora’s Box enjoys a mention! Great poem!

    1. jargnar Avatar

      Hey! Thank you :)

      Super.You did notice the Pandora’s Box mention!
      Brilliant.
      Thankyou.

  19. Artswebshow Avatar

    wow, that is an incredibly complex acrostic, brilliantly done

  20. brennanbogert Avatar

    That is really a great acrostic. Very creative.

    1. jargnar Avatar

      thanks!

  21. uma.a Avatar

    “If only I had a chance to make things better”..really wonderful acrostic.

    CAN YOU JOIN US IN AND SUBMIT YOUR LINK???
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    1. jargnar Avatar

      sure :)

  22. Sam373 Avatar
    Sam373

    I NOMINATE YOU FOR
    The Versatile Blogger Award
    I am honored but I feel you are more deserving than I based on the way you paint
    with words and write with hues of color.

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