The Tale of our spin

The moon, up and about
when time hit its note
pale and abstruse he stood
his demeanor, wise and kingly.

but there he was, and then wasn’t
dawn it was, as the clock ticked on
and thus he came,
eponym to the billion or so.

The Sun in his chariot,
golden and glowing, smiled down
on his nine minions, for now.
everything was happy and glorious

so near he stands now,
swelling on his own fodder.
to act paladin, and yet that
look, savage and baleful

for without the cloth
on our mother’s bosom,
the yin unbalanced, he flares
his ire, and his life, lurks.

the existence itself, an infant
for now he isn’t pervert enough
but surely, we have misunderstood
for our father, isn’t a bloody cheat.

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is my contribution to, Thursday Poets Rally Week 27

25 responses to “The Tale of our spin”

  1. Jingle Avatar

    the image is timeless,
    what a skillful poem!
    :)

    1. jargnar Avatar

      Thank you :)

  2. Jingle Avatar

    great,
    I welcome you in with open arms,

    this poem is selected,
    let me know after you are done,
    visit and comment from participants list, do a minimum 18,
    of course, the more you visit, the more feedback you get,
    have fun!
    :)

    1. jargnar Avatar

      thank you :)
      and, will do :)

  3. Anky0112 Avatar

    what a vivid amazing poem… so true,…

    keep it up…
    thanks for sharing it:)
    viva la vida:)

    1. jargnar Avatar

      for poems that make the world better :)
      viva la vida! :)

  4. WEM Avatar
    WEM

    A worthy question. May you find an answer. I like the work too.

    1. jargnar Avatar

      thank you! :)

  5. enreal Avatar

    the imagery painted with your words is powerful. nice job

    1. jargnar Avatar

      an honor! thanks. :)

  6. Leo (Leonnyes) Avatar

    very beautiful, celestial poetry here Jargnar :D

    my entry for the rally is The Butterfly Lover

    1. jargnar Avatar

      Thank you Leo :)

  7. Kavita Avatar

    Whoa!!! That was lovely… and one could read in between those lines and fine another dimension to it altogether!!
    It was a fascinating read!!!
    “nine minions, for now” — loved it! :)
    Kudos..

    1. jargnar Avatar

      a toast to the English language and its expressionist vocabulary eh :)
      Much appreciated coming from such a talented player of the words. thank you.

  8. Artswebshow Avatar

    I like this.
    Nicely done

    1. jargnar Avatar

      Thank u :)

  9. cesargealogo Avatar

    The moon is one of the mysteries. Imagery is great in this particular poem.

    1. jargnar Avatar

      much appreciated, thanks :)

  10. Dakshima Avatar

    Superb writing.
    see me on http://loveamongotherthings.wordpress.com/
    Thanx :D

    1. jargnar Avatar

      Thank you!

  11. 網路攝影機 Avatar

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